Redaccion de ingles, 求错误和补充

1140715831 · 发表于 2012-11-26 23:42:00

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I liva in the soutg of china
50 years ago the town was very different
House used to be small and low. now house are some block of flats. inside the house didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning. there used to have chimney with fireplace and Fan

chat of offside fiend is very different too. they didn't use to chat on the internet. they used to send letters. however there didn't use to post box. now there are post box.

people didn't use to car, train, bus and aircraft. they used to the carriage and walk. so there didn't use to bus stop and traffic light. Now people always use the car and bus.

rmj · 发表于 2012-11-27 00:11:51

拼写错误:
liva -> live
soutg -> south
House -> houses
fiend -> friend(s)

1140715831 · 发表于 2012-11-27 00:14:23

rmj 发表于 2012-11-26 23:11

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拼写错误:
liva -> live
soutg -> south

谢谢，请问句子有错误吗

rmj · 发表于 2012-11-27 00:22:28

1140715831 发表于 2012-11-26 23:14

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谢谢，请问句子有错误吗

要多用复数。譬如：
now houses are blocks of flats
the houses didn't have central heating
... ...

puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-11-27 06:19:33

我帮你改一改，错的地方我用黑体字标明。

“chat of offside fiend （？） is very different too. they didn't use to chat on the internet. they used to send letters. however there didn't use to post box. now there are post box.”

The way of communications between friends was different as well.
They did not chat on the internet, but sent letters to each other.
However, there were no post boxes as there are now.

以及朋友之间的通信方式是不同的。
他们不上网聊天，而是发信给对方。
然而，没有现在的邮筒。

"people didn't use to car, train, bus and aircraft. they used to the carriage and walk. so there didn't use to bus stop and traffic light. Now people always use the car and bus."

People did not travel by cars, trains, buses, and airplanes, but instead by carriages and by foot,
so there were no bus stops and traffic lights. But nowadays people always use cars and buses.

人们不乘坐汽车，火车，公共汽车，飞机，而是乘马车或步行，
所以没有巴士站和交通灯。但现在，人们总是使用的小汽车和公交车。

salvor · 发表于 2012-11-27 10:31:33

I live in South China
50 years ago the town was very different
Houses used to be small and low. Now houses are block of flats. House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside, they used to have chimney with fireplace and fan.

Chat of offside friends was very different too. They did not chat on the internet. They were used to send letters. however there didn't use post box. now there are post box.

People didn't use car, train, bus and aircraft. they were used to the carriage and walk. so they didn't used to bus stop and traffic light. Now people always use the car and bus

1140715831 · 发表于 2012-11-27 15:50:57

puravidaXH 发表于 2012-11-27 05:19

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我帮你改一改，错的地方我用黑体字标明。

“chat of offside fiend （？） is very different too. they d ...

谢谢

1140715831 · 发表于 2012-11-27 15:51:14

salvor 发表于 2012-11-27 09:31

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I live in South China
50 years ago the town was very different
Houses used to be small and low. Now ...

谢谢

1140715831 · 发表于 2012-11-27 15:51:33

rmj 发表于 2012-11-26 23:22

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要多用复数。譬如：
now houses are blocks of flats
the houses didn't have central heating

谢谢

puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-11-27 16:47:10

salvor 发表于 2012-11-27 09:31

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I live in South China
50 years ago the town was very different
Houses used to be small and low. Now ...

很好，有些小错误。

House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House didn't have central ... or House not used to have ...
reference: http://www.englishgrammarsecrets.com/usedto/menu.php

they used to have chimney with fireplace and fan => they used to have chimneys with fireplaces and fans

They were used to send letters => They used to send letters, or they were used to sending letters.

Used to <do something> or be used to <something>

now there are post box => now there are post boxes

so they didn't used to bus stop and traffic light => so they were not used to bus stops and traffic lights

Now people always use the car and bus => Now people always use cars and buses

salvor · 发表于 2012-11-27 17:06:05

puravidaXH 发表于 2012-11-27 16:47

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很好，有些小错误。

House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House ...

House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House didn't have central ... or House not used to have ...
reference: http://www.englishgrammarsecrets.com/usedto/menu.php
不同意，两个结构表达的意思不一样

they used to have chimney with fireplace and fan => they used to have chimneys with fireplaces and fans
同意

They were used to send letters => They used to send letters, or they were used to sending letters.
同意

Used to <do something> or be used to <something>

now there are post box => now there are post boxes
同意

so they didn't used to bus stop and traffic light => so they were not used to bus stops and traffic lights
同意

Now people always use the car and bus => Now people always use cars and buses
不同意，意思不一样

puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-11-27 17:10:15

Morito 发表于 2012-11-27 15:56

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But now houses are some block of flats.
Inside didnt use to have central heating OR air conditionin ...

Inside didnt use to have central heating OR air conditioning.
=> Inside not used to have ...
OR inside didn't use to have

"Do" 和 "used to" 不能混在一起耶。

Comunication with friends from other places were very different too

Comunication -> Communication 在英语里有两个m耶
were -> was 并且是单数耶

puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-11-27 17:20:03

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salvor 发表于 2012-11-27 16:06

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House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House didn't have central ...

“
House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House didn't have central ... or House not used to have ...
reference: http://www.englishgrammarsecrets.com/usedto/menu.php
不同意，两个结构表达的意思不一样
”

有啥子不同意的吗？"did not use to" 语法不对耶。
可以说：I used to smoke
不可以说：I did not use to smoke

你能找出理论或例子支持你的结构吗？我给一个支持我的：
http://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/usedto.html

salvor · 发表于 2012-11-27 17:25:49

puravidaXH 发表于 2012-11-27 17:20

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House didn't use to have central heating and air conditioning inside => House didn't have centra ...

http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/radio/specials/1346_gramchallenge15/

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Listen to the programme!
Used to / didn't use to

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Positive sentences	I used to smoke 20 cigarettes a day. I used to eat loads of junk food.
Negative sentences	I didn't use to do any exercise. I didn't use to swim very well.
All pronouns take used to / didn't use to	I You She He It We They	used to / didn't use to	eat a lot of sweets. eat meat. live in the city. have long hair.

Used to and didn't use to are only used to talk about past habits. There is no present form. To talk about present habits we can use the present simple. When using these structures there are often two parts to the sentence, something about the past and something about the present, for example:

I used to drive to work but now I go by car.
I didn't use to like coffee but I love it now.

puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-11-27 17:57:28

salvor 发表于 2012-11-27 16:25

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http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/radio/specials/1346_gramchallenge15/

你是对的。"used to" 的否定形式有两种，你用的那种我不熟悉，
我说你是错的结论是错的。谢谢你，又学到知识了。

下面的链接对两种用法均有介绍。

http://www.pearsonlongman.com/ae ... /articles/00074.htm

Used not to is called "formal style" by          Michael Swan (a British writer)
in Practical English Usage, 2e          (Oxford University Press, 1995).
He lists "didn't use to"          as an informal style.

leanneainimen · 发表于 2012-12-4 19:57:28

我觉得这个可能是翻译软件做的，很难一一改，根据我理解的意思重写一个，供你参考

I live in a town in south china, which is very different now with 50 years ago.
Before, the houses were low and small and now people mainly live in flats with a few floors. There was no central heating system or air conditioner, instead, chimneys and fans were used respectively in winter and summer.
The way of communicating with friends who lived in another place were also different. There was no internet chatting and writing letters was the way, which is considered the old fashioned email.
There were no modern ways of transportation like cars, trains, buses or airplanes. People used to use carriages or their own feet. Therefore, there were no bus stops or traffic lights. However, people of nowadays always go out by cars or buses.
people didn't use to car, train, bus and aircraft. they used to the carriage and walk. so there didn't use to bus stop and traffic light. Now people always use the car and bus.

leaff928 · 发表于 2012-12-4 22:13:03

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puravidaXH · 发表于 2012-12-4 23:36:09

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leanneainimen 发表于 2012-12-4 18:57

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我觉得这个可能是翻译软件做的，很难一一改，根据我理解的意思重写一个，供你参考

I live in a town in so ...

我觉得写得很好，意思清楚，语言通顺。我唯一能找到的错误是
different with, 应该是 different from. 还有 town 和 50 years ago
是两个不同的东西，不能相比，应该说：different from what it was
50 years ago.

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